--- Harriet Bazley harriet@bazley.freeuk.com wrote:
On 13 Feb 2001 as I do recall, Natasa Tucev wrote:
Can you imagine: a) Vila saying this to Blake? b) Vila saying this at all?
Without knowing the context, this is incredibly difficult, and I'll inevitably make the wrong assumptions about the surrounding plot... but here's my attempt at a more plausible re-rendering, from Vila's point of view. I'm guessing that we're post-Star One here, probably on Gauda Prime.
He let Blake's voice run on, as the words slid over him in all their persuasive familiarity; neither of them really listening any more. They'd been through this so many times before, so long ago - and now, suddenly, it was no longer the same......
Absolutely wonderful!
I must confess that I didn't feel ill by the shown example. I can't remember the story title or who wrote it - but I do remember the passage. At the time I remember thinking, how very unlike the characters but because Vila was defending Avon - I put on a smile and enjoyed it :-)
However; I must say, I very much preferred the re-rendering as done by Harriet Bazley, it was more in keeping with the characters - I loved this! I would love to read any more stories that you may have on the net.
I am currently attempting to write a B7 story for the net myself and I see by some of these posts that I have a long way to go before it may be ready :-)
Cheryl.
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